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xx Suicide xx

Laying on this bed
All these thoughts fill my head

Having a pill,
I'm Leaving,
I'm sorry for this still,
I cannot be another mistake
Our love it's all fake

I'm destined for death
I've stopped helping everyone else

Swallow me whole, Take into me
Lying here with that picture
Is where it begun
Somewhere alone the line we stopped being fun

Im sorry is what i wrote
Today on this note
The one i left for you
With the memories of my life

The nothing pieces of my existance
I feel like this is it
Taking too many pills
All i can do is lie still

Laying on this bed
With no more thoughts through my head
Lying here,
Simply Dead!



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i was gonna cry when i read this, i can relate to a few lines in this poem, its beautiful
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so beautiful....
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its really good there is so much emotion in this poem
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This poems really strong. I think I know how your feeling about it.
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that is really good
i like the ending Applause.gif
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you know what. i really liked that poem. sums up my feelings right not
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This is realy good! I love the end and all the emotion that comes running at you when you read it, every word contains a new emotion is how i see this poem. wub.gif
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Great poem..
Sometimes i thought i was going to cry..
Soo beautiful..
love it <3..
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Thanks to everyone who put comments on this poem it means so much, this poem was written wen my ex decided to leave me for my best m8 so thanks everyone for their comments,
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Woow

Simply irresistible smile.gif....


I like ur All suicidal poems u just Know how to Express it smile.gif


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That was real great.
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QUOTE (LioRomio @ Apr 12 2008, 06:26 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Woow

Simply irresistible smile.gif....


I like ur All suicidal poems u just Know how to Express it smile.gif



QUOTE (EMOATLANTIS @ Apr 12 2008, 07:47 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
That was real great.



Thanks guys, I love getting feedback and knowing that u enjoy it so much

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Its very good
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the that poem is a very good example of shit literature. it's not a good poem. I'm sick of hearing all this bullshit sympathising and falseness as these cretins on this forum just blatantly lie and give you a false sense of comfort, buttering you up nutil somebody just points out that you really don't have any poetic skill, not to say that it won't improve. I'm just sick of hearing all this bullshit and get angy why people are afraid to tell people when something is shit, rather than trying to kiss ass and lie just to try and be nice. You would be better off giving them the decency to at least give them an honest account of what the poem really is worth, and not just telling them what they want to be told.
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QUOTE (Emo linker @ Apr 13 2008, 07:17 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Its very good


Thanks u hun i hope everyone liked it and feel free to check out my new on ecalled my blade ....


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OMG this is very good, can really relate to it, great job
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That was really beautiful. I almost cried when I read this. <3
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QUOTE (A Failure By Design @ Apr 18 2008, 06:29 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
OMG this is very good, can really relate to it, great job



QUOTE (fairytale @ Apr 18 2008, 07:30 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
That was really beautiful. I almost cried when I read this. <3


Hey guys thanks for your feedback on one of my favourite pieces, feel free to take a look at some of my other works and please giv feedback on them too ok Thanks oncew again
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