He stands there,
the papers in his hand,
homework in his backpack,
his hair swaying gently in the breeze.
He stands there,
thinking of you,
and what you'd had,
his palms growing sweaty.
He stands there,
wishing it would've lasted,
and that you were still together,
a tear welling in his eye.
He stands there,
knowing there was nobody else like you,
knowing he would never be appreciated again,
his hand starting to tremble.
He stands there,
as the train approaches,
a thunderous escape,
his heart becoming jumpy.
He stood there,
no-one even saw him move,
he couldnt stop thinking of you,
his body lying still.
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Romanticide
Started by
OD1694
, Oct 17 2007 05:27 AM
#1
Posted 17 October 2007 - 05:27 AM
#2
Posted 17 October 2007 - 11:02 AM
omg that poem is so good seriously it gives me chills i luv these kind of poems go you for posting it!!!
#3
Posted 17 October 2007 - 11:07 AM
thanks
ill put more on some time
ill put more on some time
#4
Posted 21 October 2007 - 12:56 PM
this is really good
#5
Posted 21 October 2007 - 08:28 PM
oi thts pretty good
#6
Posted 21 October 2007 - 11:08 PM
thanlks
#7
Posted 22 October 2007 - 09:46 AM
So beutiful!!! Ur the best Ollie!!!
#8
Posted 22 October 2007 - 09:51 AM
hehe thanks, i have another on here,
its called [Untitled]?
its called [Untitled]?
#9
Posted 22 October 2007 - 03:14 PM
wow. thatz really good. *tear*
#10
Posted 22 October 2007 - 04:53 PM
wow. thats great. how long have u been writing for?
#11
Posted 22 October 2007 - 11:00 PM
since around april
#12
Posted 23 October 2007 - 08:31 AM
if anyone wants more theres some on www.bebo.com/my-only-escape
i put about 1 new per week
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i put about 1 new per week
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#13
Posted 23 October 2007 - 03:13 PM
that was awesome...
#14
Posted 04 November 2007 - 07:59 PM
woah that seriously gives you chills thinking about this poem...i loved it keep writing poems like this
#15
Posted 04 November 2007 - 08:07 PM
omg extremely well done! i love the imagry
#16
Posted 04 November 2007 - 08:12 PM
(OD1694)
He stands there,
the papers in his hand,
homework in his backpack,
his hair swaying gently in the breeze.
He stands there,
thinking of you,
and what you'd had,
his palms growing sweaty.
He stands there,
wishing it would've lasted,
and that you were still together,
a tear welling in his eye.
He stands there,
knowing there was nobody else like you,
knowing he would never be appreciated again,
his hand starting to tremble.
He stands there,
as the train approaches,
a thunderous escape,
his heart becoming jumpy.
He stood there,
no-one even saw him move,
he couldnt stop thinking of you,
his body lying still.
the papers in his hand,
homework in his backpack,
his hair swaying gently in the breeze.
He stands there,
thinking of you,
and what you'd had,
his palms growing sweaty.
He stands there,
wishing it would've lasted,
and that you were still together,
a tear welling in his eye.
He stands there,
knowing there was nobody else like you,
knowing he would never be appreciated again,
his hand starting to tremble.
He stands there,
as the train approaches,
a thunderous escape,
his heart becoming jumpy.
He stood there,
no-one even saw him move,
he couldnt stop thinking of you,
his body lying still.
o my gosh it gave me chills too...
you are very talented..you are one of the better poets that have posted on this site.. very unexpected ending i love it!
you make the reader expect him to board the train and run away or something and then, wow...
#17
Guest__*
Posted 08 November 2007 - 01:58 AM
wow
amazing
amazing
#18
Guest__*
Posted 08 November 2007 - 11:43 AM
that brought back bad memorys and a chill down my spine
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