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He stands there,
the papers in his hand,
homework in his backpack,
his hair swaying gently in the breeze.

He stands there,
thinking of you,
and what you'd had,
his palms growing sweaty.

He stands there,
wishing it would've lasted,
and that you were still together,
a tear welling in his eye.

He stands there,
knowing there was nobody else like you,
knowing he would never be appreciated again,
his hand starting to tremble.

He stands there,
as the train approaches,
a thunderous escape,
his heart becoming jumpy.

He stood there,
no-one even saw him move,
he couldnt stop thinking of you,
his body lying still.
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omg that poem is so good seriously it gives me chills i luv these kind of poems go you for posting it!!! biggrin.gif
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thanks

ill put more on some time
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this is really good
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oi thts pretty good
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thanlks
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So beutiful!!! Ur the best Ollie!!! biggrin.gif
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hehe thanks, i have another on here,
its called [Untitled]?
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wow. thatz really good. *tear*
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wow. thats great. how long have u been writing for?
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since around april
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if anyone wants more theres some on www.bebo.com/my-only-escape
i put about 1 new per week

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that was awesome...
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woah that seriously gives you chills thinking about this poem...i loved it keep writing poems like this sad.gif
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omg extremely well done! i love the imagry
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He stands there,
the papers in his hand,
homework in his backpack,
his hair swaying gently in the breeze.

He stands there,
thinking of you,
and what you'd had,
his palms growing sweaty.

He stands there,
wishing it would've lasted,
and that you were still together,
a tear welling in his eye.

He stands there,
knowing there was nobody else like you,
knowing he would never be appreciated again,
his hand starting to tremble.

He stands there,
as the train approaches,
a thunderous escape,
his heart becoming jumpy.

He stood there,
no-one even saw him move,
he couldnt stop thinking of you,
his body lying still.

o my gosh it gave me chills too...
you are very talented..you are one of the better poets that have posted on this site.. very unexpected ending i love it!
you make the reader expect him to board the train and run away or something and then, wow...
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wow
amazing
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that brought back bad memorys and a chill down my spine
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