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A Wish


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A wish

I saw him...
had a thought,
discovered a feeling,
made a wish.

A thought so true and sincere,
a feeling that melt my heart.
A wish so passionate and sweet,
a wish I thought would last.

One day our thoughts met.
His smile revealed a feeling.
An unforgettable moment
gave life to the wish.

But under the shadow of the fear,
the feelings were hidden.
By the river of the reality,
the wishes washed away.
My heart left empty.
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Wow.. i love it <3
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really nice Applause.gif keep it up
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Not so bad for a first one
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Good start.
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QUOTE (DarkLove @ May 1 2008, 10:12 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
A wish

I saw him...
had a thought,
discovered a feeling,
made a wish.

A thought so true and sincere,
a feeling that melt my heart.
A wish so passionate and sweet,
a wish I thought would last.

One day our thoughts met.
His smile revealed a feeling.
An unforgettable moment
gave life to the wish.

But under the shadow of the fear,
the feelings were hidden.
By the river of the reality,
the wishes washed away.
My heart left empty.

This was beautifully sad. I think to admire from afar is an aching feeling, a void unfullfilled. the yearning of what could be. And there lies the problem. We are prisoners of our own mind.
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Awwww....loved it! Keep writing poems, you're really good at it! smile.gif
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That was really good for a first poem!

Keep it up! Your good.

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Hey hon. Loved it. Keep writing homes!
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QUOTE (Minerva @ May 9 2008, 07:12 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
This was beautifully sad. I think to admire from afar is an aching feeling, a void unfullfilled. the yearning of what could be. And there lies the problem. We are prisoners of our own mind.

Thank you happy.gif
The second sentence really makes sense,
but I can't understand what are you trying to say with the others O.O

Thank you every1 8>
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