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One Of My Poems


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hEaRt ShUttER

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I just wanted to know if this was as bad as i thought it was... It actually has something to do with my life I guess.... Feed back would be appricated mellow.gif

Shutters


I have a wall you can`t jump over...
I have a door you can`t get passed...
I have a window you can`t look in...
I have a gate to keep you out...

My locks you`ve picked...
My traps you`ve sprung...

Still my shutters keep you blind... And still you persist...But why?

You are thinking of him arnt you? As you sit alone...And a tear slides down your cheek...As you watch it fall, you wonder why, Why are you still here?

You reach down to pick a rose,a thorn pricks you,and as you look at your finger a
drop of blood, bright red, runs down your finger... Like your heart, so bittersweet...

As you see him in the halls, you stumble and fall...In the end you sit alone, in a corner, by yourself,and darkness surrounds you,you can`t see, you gasp aloud, you are afraid, not of the dark but what you see,you see him, standing there, you open your eyes but you are forsaken...

I have a wall you can`t jump over...
I have a door you can`t get passed...
I have a window you can`t look in...
I have a gate to keep you out...

I have a heart, shattered, broken...So I keep my shutters drawn...

Do not try, my love, to fix me, you are better off... Me alone, in the dark, that is where I shall stay...

Shattered, broken, shutters drawn...







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emoboy369

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Eh honestly me no likey that much but everyone has a prefrence and even in wat poems to right as I enjoy death and love poems only death poems written in third person though
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i luvd it
it made me kinda sad

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I thought it was pretty fucking awesome
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That was really good.
Way better than the crap write
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