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To Whomever It May Concern, on behalf of Alice:

It has come to my attention I'm trapped in a place I do not know
Lost and cold, I'm surely alone,
Although I've often passed some signs
But I do not understand them, for they are in rhyme.

A cat has appeared, who speaks in riddles
and stained glass flies who play the fiddle.
I've played chess with the best,
and have had tea with a hatter.
Yet still I find that something's the matter.

The flowers here are kind and knowing
The greenest grass that needs no mowing
There are mice the size of hounds
who often scamper 'round.

And soon it came upon the age
that I would meet a rabbit, who was a page,
for the queen of hearts who played
the age-old game; croquet*.

I seem to have angered her majesty,
and learned quite quickly, I shall recieve no mercy.
For this I am deeply sorry
And ask of you to take care of my dolly.

Feed Dinah, my sweetest kitten
and don't forget her woolen mittens.
Tell my sister I shan't be home
for in Wonderland, I'll always roam.

With Love from,
ALICE




*Sorry if I spelled croquet wrong.


I know that it's a little weird, and not everything has to do with neither the book nor the movie, but oh, well.

Tell me what you guys think, because I'm curious to see if anyone other than me thinks it's not the greatest I've done, by a long shot.


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Wow, really good. I love Lewis Carroll's work, and I found your take on a poetic letter really interesting.


Nicely done.
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I like the use of partial rhymes instead of making every single line rhyme with a full-on rhyme, like most novice poets try to do.

Good job.
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Thank you both! I love mr. carrol's work as well.
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wOW..Just wOW..I mEan..Holy fuck!...best letter I've ever read
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QUOTE (In_Patient_Procedure @ May 8 2008, 06:13 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
wOW..Just wOW..I mEan..Holy fuck!...best letter I've ever read


Thank you, I suppose, although I don't necessarily agree with you.
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Haha, I love this!
No one's ever thought of writiing a letter fromt eh point of Alice. [At leat, none that I ahve read]
Love it!
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QUOTE (Different @ May 13 2008, 05:34 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Haha, I love this!
No one's ever thought of writiing a letter fromt eh point of Alice. [At leat, none that I ahve read]
Love it!


It's nothing compared to the stuff you do...
thank you, though!
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