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My First Poem..

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bittersweet_eMo

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This is the first poem i wrote..so be gentle and don't spit on it...smile.gif)

darkest love comes upon us,
blackest romance stays between us,
the whisper,the silence,the look,
it all shall stay 4ever ina my heart-shaper book,
and pages as the days turn,
but every page you and your name burn..
my heart slowly sinks,
while my soul in dreams with your links..
black roses,puple light..
oh,did my soul once shone so bright..!
but,you cut my heart and let me bleed,
and darkest sadness in my mind left it's seed...
now,i can forget you not,
and didn't you know -i miss you a lot!!!

yeah,i was a mess...and so is this poem,right??
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no, I liked it, believe me, on my first couple, I don't think they are good at all, even some I put 2gether quickly I think suck, but it gets the message across, so its good. Big Grin.gif
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that was really good. keep up the good work!
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QUOTE (bittersweet_eMo @ May 11 2008, 01:42 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
yeah,i was a mess...and so is this poem,right??


WOW, that is the greatest poem i have ever heard, girl wink.gif Applause.gif
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