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All my poems(i think they suk)PLEASE READ!{added others=]}


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these are all my poems on emo-corner.com put together

i thinnk my life lived itself out. i have nobody that understands me, and few friends. i get critisized and threatened every day at my skool. im the only emo there. add me please. it wud help.
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wats the point of living/ its almost gone for me. :'(



A seed of hate was planted
In the hole where my heart used to be.
I love you even though,
My malevolance is now a tree.
The buning times turn all its' leaves to ashes.
And from them a malignant form molds around me.
My heart becomes a monolith of malice,
But your name is carved into it so let it be.
i will rub off the blood on your windshield,
And break it with a plea.
A pathway to your warming heart is opened,
And a crate holding a seraph is implanted into me.
The angel will kill me and my love
If it can break free.
The wings are spread,
And out of the locker it comes to me.
Looking at my needle-hole halo,
It shrunk away.
Leaving a heart of bloodied feathers.
I gave you my heart so you caould stay today,
but tommorow you will throw it back at me.
A white raven with bloodshot eyes
Tells me my malice will be replenished;
Just as my love was banished.
If i twll you i aant love,
My words are all maltreat.
You flew away from me
And left me crying.
I can taste my own malefic tears,
And my revolutionary void was dying.
I was a revelation,
And you were more than a girl trying.




She wanted to love,
And i wanted to dream.
I told her my heart,
Is more than it seems.
She walked away,
Not hearing my silent screams.
I said today,
Is forever gone.
My sky turning grey,
My love torn away.
She wanted to love,
but didnt hear what i had to say.
i found your love
Buried in the snow.
I tried my best
But it wouldn't show.
I wanted to give up and go,
But my heart wanted you so.
Why did you leave,
And break my heart?
Our love was a whole,
And it was torn apart,
My weakened soul
Was left to die,
In the snow.
Whats left of a lie,
will not go.
i whispered your name,
And you ran back to me.
Crying in shame,
You pulled me out of the bloodstained snow.
But my heart was already frozen,
And you were too late.
You pressed you lips to my face,
And felt the cold
Of my lost embrace.
I have loved you,
But now there is a hole were my heart used to be.






I loved only you and I dreamed only dreams,
But those words playing the role of a gunshot in my head,
Were so far away from my heart.
Please tell me that the throbbing will go away,
And you will return to stay with me.
Please turn away,
And know I will never disappear.
Now I walk away and leave you my shadow.
I want to love you again,
And I wish you would tell me you loved me so.
When I look at you now,
I see an angel holding my broken heart;
Your tears drop onto it,
And it mends with your love.
Come back to me,
And let me love you again;
But only if I can.




My death moon is full with a silver lining.
As it turns around,
I see your lips on the frozen metal of my soul.
A hand comes out of the night,
And through my heart it sticks a living pole.
Writhing it causes no pain while looking at you.
But when I look away,
My nimbus fades,
And turns to an aura of forlorn.
The mouth of my damned soul is open,
And itâ??s breath smells of sorrow.
Your love warms me,
And my blood begins to thaw,
Leaking out of my eyes.
Seraphs gather around,
Shielding you from me.
My wings beat in hate,
But I cannot do anything,
So I fly away to my hell,
And a dream is spilt by devotion.




Open your eyes,
And exhale the love.
Can you feel the lies?
Close your eyes,
And inhale the pain.
Smile as my love dies.
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Can you see a star
will you impugn it,
Like you did my love?
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Can you feel the heat?
WIll your heart decieve you?
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Will i love again?
No i will not.
You froze my heart,
And you buried me in hate.
You tied a silver string of lorn,
Around my dreams.
You breathed your demise on me,
And my hope was gone.
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Will it return?
Can i love again?
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No, my frozen heart
is not capable of such things now...
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somebody post!
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i liiiikkkee em smile.gif
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thnx
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O my word, I'm really mad about them! I think it's very kwl that your poems seem diffrnt than the rest, like there's more behind the words, it's asif you should look deeper than what you see. I dunno if it's supposd to be like that, but that's what I feel. The second poem is nice, feels like my life.
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i guess there is some of that in them
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:Cry: theyre beautiful.*sniffles* :Cry:
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well i guess more people like em than i thought
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There all really good!!
But this one is my fav.


She wanted to love,
And i wanted to dream.
I told her my heart,
Is more than it seems.
She walked away,
Not hearing my silent screams.
I said today,
Is forever gone.
My sky turning grey,
My love torn away.
She wanted to love,
but didnt hear what i had to say.
i found your love
Buried in the snow.
I tried my best
But it wouldn't show.
I wanted to give up and go,
But my heart wanted you so.
Why did you leave,
And break my heart?
Our love was a whole,
And it was torn apart,
My weakened soul
Was left to die,
In the snow.
Whats left of a lie,
will not go.
i whispered your name,
And you ran back to me.
Crying in shame,
You pulled me out of the bloodstained snow.
But my heart was already frozen,
And you were too late.
You pressed you lips to my face,
And felt the cold
Of my lost embrace.
I have loved you,
But now there is a hole were my heart used to be.
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thnx, wat d u like about it?
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i like them. smile.gif
will you take a look at mine?
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They're all amazing, the first is my favorite though.

So visual!

Check mine biggrin.gif

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i wrot the poems when i was depressed, so i guess it kinda made them better.
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My death moon is full with a silver lining.
As it turns around,
I see your lips on the frozen metal of my soul.
A hand comes out of the night,
And through my heart it sticks a living pole.
Writhing it causes no pain while looking at you.
But when I look away,
My nimbus fades,
And turns to an aura of forlorn.
The mouth of my damned soul is open,
And itâ??s breath smells of sorrow.
Your love warms me,
And my blood begins to thaw,
Leaking out of my eyes.
Seraphs gather around,
Shielding you from me.
My wings beat in hate,
But I cannot do anything,
So I fly away to my hell,
And a dream is spilt by devotion.

this is my fave
but they are all very very good!
and yes, it does help when u write while being depressed... it helps the emotion come through clearer, and it doesnt sound forced...
i like ur metaphors....
u have a lot of passion in ur writing!
keep writing but just dont try too hard to make it sound good... it sounds best natural:-)
gr8 job
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i love these...
although they seem a little bit abstract, they have alot of description and substance, you demonstrated a strong vocabulary and alot of effort, as well as great results.

you actually have some talent at writing
not just a cliche' message to send
never question yourself
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wow. thanks everybody. i didnt like them that much. I find it interesting that everyone likes a different one.
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i added anpother one. i dont like it, but i just felt like writing something.
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awww... :_( that one makes me sad.. its good..
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ur poems r better them mine
lol
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wow...thos are really amazing [jealous]
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