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SHE CUT UP HER WRIST


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Poll: do you liek the poem (30 member(s) have cast votes)

  1. yeah it was ok (4 votes [13.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 13.33%

  2. yes but it was very sad (25 votes [83.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 83.33%

  3. yes it was good and happy (1 votes [3.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 3.33%

  4. no it was way to sad (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

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also...I NEED A TITLE FOR THIS POEM..any sugestions...



she loved him so much
but love wasnt enough
the world still hurt
she still cryied
often she bled
wishing she died
and he never knew
and she never told
he thought she was fine
till he received a call
in which she made
crying so hard
she asked him to come
she asked him to hurry
then hung up the phone
and went to her room
the boy so scared
ran to her house
as fast as he could
but he came to late
shed cut up her wrist
cut away her life
her eyes cold and dead
beside her lay
a note and the knife
the note said
she loved hime
but it wasnt enough
the pain in this world
it was just to much
"i hurt myself
for i hurt so bad
but you never knew
and i never told
now i wished i had
but now its to late
so just please remember
i loved you alot
with all of my heart
my death is my mistake
i know this to
but remember please
i always loved you
with a passion larger
than the universe
i loved you above all"
but lvoe wasnt enough
he finished the note
a tear ran down
the boys wet cheek
it hurt what he saw
it hurt what he knew
it hurt what he read
but mostly what hurt
was his love before him
cold and dead
so he picked up the knife
hating it all
feelign at fault
for not noticing
he slit open his skin
he opened it deep
and as he bled
he sat against the wall
the girl in his arms
blood all around them
the note in his hand
the knife in hers
as he left the world
the night passed
and the mornign came
the two lovers
found dead beside eachother
they died togather
there love for eachother
wasnt enough
yet it was to much
so they both died
side by side
and togeth burried
next to eachother
in the graves
etched the words
of the two lovers note
and a dove in the corner
carring a heart
to let all know
they loved eachother
though they were so young
there love was so strong
that without the other
they wouldnt move on
so they died togather
she died to escape
he died for love
together they died
side by side
together they died
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Awsome poem but its so sad. :Cry:
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thanx..i know its sad..almost all of my poems are..like out of 200 i think about 189 at least are..or somethin like that....but thank you...
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your welcome
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i dont supose youd have any sugestions for a title
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Humm......Dead Love? Dead in Blood? Dying for Love? I dunno
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hmm thanx ill consider those
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okay yea I'm srry today I lack in creativity
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this kinda reminds me of romeo and juliet biggrin.gif
its good
as for titles..
hmm...
lasting love
the lovers last
together forever.
hm idk
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lol..i just recently saw juliet with my advanced english class cause were reading it in class..but i never realy realized how simalar it was till you mentioned it..
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lol
have you ever seen the romeo and juliet with leonardo dicaprio???
its hilarious, and it helped me understand it alot. its what they showed us in school. its like a modern version
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hmm i dont knwo what we saw..we went to a play so yeah
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yeah well leonardo dicaprios version is freaking awesome i loved it
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lol...... laugh.gif :? i have no idea who that is laugh.gif
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wow
that was amazing
but
it made me really sad.
but yes i also agree it reminded me of romeo and juliet...
and yeah ive seen the modern one with whatshisname...
it was really good.
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thank you
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very sad..... :Cry: :Cry: :Cry: :Cry:
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almost all my poetry is
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ur title can be,..... Dying in Love.......
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hmm maybe
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