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SHE CUT UP HER WRIST


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Poll: do you liek the poem (30 member(s) have cast votes)

  1. yeah it was ok (4 votes [13.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 13.33%

  2. yes but it was very sad (25 votes [83.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 83.33%

  3. yes it was good and happy (1 votes [3.33%])

    Percentage of vote: 3.33%

  4. no it was way to sad (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

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#21
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"True love etched in blood"
is what i would call it.
and yeah it did remind me of romeo and juliet!
i have always <3ed that story...
i was in a play and i was juliet, i honestly cried as i was "killing myself"
it was so incredible to play that part...
very good poem.. i <3 it.
if i could give you a tiny bit of helpful criticism:
i would say to work on your rhyme scheme a little.
make the ends of the sentences rhyme a tiny bit better.
it had me going back and needing to re read it at some places cuz i couldnt tell where i was at cuz it didnt rhyme somewhat.
i kno watcha mean about the sad poems...
i think i wrote 2 happy ones,
and then when i write ones that are about love, and kinda happyish, i always write about my feelings of foreboding and dread, so it kinda puts a damper on it...
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#22
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this was so good..for the titles??
i think
to love & to die..lol
eternal love..
together they die..
thats a nice poem..and so sad.. sad.gif
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#23
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thanx..
im starting to think htis may be the sadest poem ive written.
but thanx for the critisism and compliments.i realy do preciate it.
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#24
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Its a great poem it shows how much they loved each other. i love the poem.
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Together, they died - the best title in this case i think
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dude awsome i started crying dude and its hard to make me cry thanx smile.gif as for the title i agree with dying in love.
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:oops: ummm thankyou...i think..sorry for making you cry....
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don't be sorry i loved it thank u
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wow,
that was really good.
yet, really sad.
& yeah, it does kinda remind me of romeo & juliet,
with a different touch / storyline.
the relevance comes in where they died together,
because one found the other dead.
and killed themself.
idk.
but it was a good / strong - ish / depressing / sad / emotional poem.
all that at once.
lol.
XD

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wow, this poem was awesome, very good
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i loved every word, line and letter...

true poet with creativity !!!

i thought it was kinda sad.. but you know.. poems arnt anything without decent emotion...


*applause*
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wow that was amazing!
I even started cryin a bit
lol
but still totally awesome!
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its great but sad
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i still cry everytime i read it
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dude.. duude... dude. dude? dude! DUDE! DUDE!!!! thats soo sad.
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yea but its awsome
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omg that was so sad it made me cry Grat job though
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told you so
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told me what?
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thats reli good. wish i could write something good like that but mine suck lol. sad and emotional, love it <3

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