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Eulogy For A Love Song

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Eulogy for a Love Song


Days are dreary nights are cold,
reach out for something left to hold,
stained glass windows pure and pale,
devoid of feeling as I exhale.

The silent line no longer hurts,
since daylight grayed a final verse,
to speak to tell to sing aloud,
beyond the memories never found.

A final breath before the plunge,
we open up our hearts and lungs,
while flowing ever gracefully,
beyond the desert to the sea.

I slowly sink beneath the waves,
take comfort in a watery grave,
and warming smiles that I have found,
lay broken here beneath the ground.

"Are you happy being alive?"
"Did I ever exist at all?"

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wow, thats deep man xD
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Wow.
i going to be honest and say that this really did bring tears to my eyes!
only few poems have made me cry.
your poem is really good. please right more you have talent.
9/10 great work.


please read mine
xxx
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Thankyou and yes, I try and comment all the poems I can but i can surely return the favour smile.gif
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Thanks RAEZOR most of my poems have a connection with my own life in some way so they tend to be pretty emotional but thanks for the comment most people think i'm shallow so it's good you say that smile.gif
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wow i'm flattered someone thought this was worthy for the best poems section, and POE/Josh agree smile.gif Thanks guys
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Nice
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thank u
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You.....you and Josh are both just....infuriating. Seriously. It's like, you love torturing me with your amazing writing skills.

Ten out of FUCKING TEN....regretably.
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Deep poem way deeper then the sea stated in this poem of yours
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haha thanx guys compliment accepted smile.gif
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....everyone is good at writing poems...im just good at writing stories sleep.gif"
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bravo bravo i love that. you are amazing
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I love it.
You can tell something is good if you see a story behind every word.
<3



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What you wrote was amazing, i wish i had talent like that you are very lucky


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well-phrased,,
well-rhymed,,
perfect topography,,
amazing^^

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That is so beautiful. it makes me sad . . . and happy at the same time.
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OMG SOO GOOD Nail Biting.gif
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wow.

that was heart grabbing;

loved it
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Wow, I like that a lot. It's deep and has true meaning. You are an amazing writer.
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