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Josh Joshson

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Stretching their heads to the sky,
They withstand the ravages of time,
For the glory of reaching your top,
Many a man will attempt the climb.

Your snowy peaks lay unaffected,
Undisturbed by mans attempts to scale,
Yet I still find it strange that,
Against such passive adversaries so many can fail.

Perhaps your inaction destroys rational thought,
Maybe it portrays you as an easy target to us,
Its a conundrum that confuses my mind,
Its a matter that one does not normally discuss.

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That bad?
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I think most people are just unsure how to attack this abstract beast! not much to criticize really i like your personification of the mountain by asking it rhetorical questions haha
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QUOTE (Ziro Valentine @ Oct 5 2008, 05:33 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I think most people are just unsure how to attack this abstract beast! not much to criticize really i like your personification of the mountain by asking it rhetorical questions haha

smile.gif thanks.

Abstract beast is right.
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Very nice, "Ode to the mountains" I like it. The personification was very well done.
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Yusss! Another chance to prove my skill at complimenting Joshie! Tyler, you'll be proud.

I love it!!!
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I can but try. biggrin.gif
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Simply amazing...
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Oh wow. Thanks smile.gif
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I'll be honest, at first i didn't quite understand what on earth you were talking about, but towards the end it was a whole lot better. It's probably just me. But other than that, it's.. i can't find the right word... it's too amazing for a right word.
Keep up the great work.

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This is very good!

I enjoyed it. It's original.
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Really enjoyed it, agree with the excellent mountain personification, it sort of flew over my head in places but in a good way, as in immersed in it, if that makes any sense whatsoever.
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wow!! very nice ^^
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wow that is a really beautiful poem i love it Batting Eyelashes.gif
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very beautiful, good personification.....i wanna climb a mountain and mess up the printless snow now:P
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awesome sauce man pure awesome
p.s i love rob zombie :)
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