It seems my life is holding still now
Is this what i've been longing for?
Feels like my lungs are sore and dying
I feel my spirit fade away
My rain of memories is falling
On the bottom of my last regrets
The darkest snow is building prison
That's where i will spend my greates days
I can't forgive myself for trying
To make this life a perfect thing
Should i just find the new beginning
Or should my effort be erased
Collide the walls and start a fire
And feel my breath beneath your skin
Oh yes, we'll sink
I hope we'll sink
Am i still here, or am i not?
I won't regret my shameful past
It's been a while, since we've met
it won't be something i'll forget
Your breath is slowly getting softer
I think it's your adrenaline
Seems like your hatred's quickly fading
It's now time for us to swim
The sky is red now, can't you see it?
It's been a month, but don't forget
I am still begging for forgiveness
For all this time you screamed and bled
Our sighs will take us to our heavens
Erasing memories and past
The blinded god will be so jelaous
Because he didn't think we'd fly
Our journey's over, hands are shaking
It seems to be the sweetest thing
I would agree to live forever
To know that you will never bleed
i don't know if it's any good, but please let me know what you guys think took me 2 hours to write it
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My poem(Not that good)
Started by
4emovek
, Feb 06 2008 12:35 PM
#1
Posted 06 February 2008 - 12:35 PM
#2
Posted 06 February 2008 - 12:39 PM
aww that's really good... deep as well
#3
Posted 06 February 2008 - 09:10 PM
Thank you Glad you liked it
#4
Posted 06 February 2008 - 09:14 PM
wow. that was great. it made me cry.
#5
Posted 07 February 2008 - 04:36 AM
i really liked that, its better than wat i can cum out with my poetry sucks ...x
#6
Posted 07 February 2008 - 09:11 AM
QUOTE (emo_lil_lou_91 @ Feb 7 2008, 12:36 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
i really liked that, its better than wat i can cum out with my poetry sucks ...x
Well... i was just sitting there trying to come up with the best i could... so i think if you did it you would do better
#7
Posted 07 February 2008 - 09:14 AM
hun, I can guarentee (sorry fr bad spelling) that both of ya will be or are very good at poetry. Most that i have read have been really good.
#8
Posted 09 February 2008 - 01:36 PM
It was fucking amazing! You've got talent!
#9
Posted 25 February 2008 - 01:28 PM
yeah, that was really amazing...i love it
#10
Posted 04 March 2008 - 08:47 AM
really good. makes me cry
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