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There’s a person in my kitchen
And I don’t quite know his name
Doesn’t look like he is wearing much
I wonder if it’s a game

He doesn’t look a happy man
And hasn’t said a word
I somehow feel it’s my fault
But the thought is quite absurd

He doesn’t sit straight in his chair
Face creased into a frown
Our eyes meet for a second
Then he stares back at the ground

I asked him how he got here
If he’s well and in good health
And this man sat in my kitchen said
‘Dude, I’m your future self.

If you’re wondering how I got here
Well, I don’t quite know myself.
But now I’m lost and lonely
No ambition, without wealth.’

But I couldn’t see a single way
He could possibly be me
Last time I checked, I was female
And my height was 5 foot 3.




Heh. I'll probably make a more serious one later.
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I like it smile.gif
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Thanks. :]
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That was actually really good!

I apologise for the surprised tone of that comment, but I took one look at that picture and thought, "Anyone who makes something of that is a genius".

Looks like I found my genius (:
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It was? Thankyou.

I was only pissing about when I wrote it.
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Well then it's damn good for a piss about poem =P
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I loved it!
It cheered me up and for that my friend you get A+ =]

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Thankyou. :3

I'm going to attempt to write something better [imo] tonight.
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i liked it =]

twist to the end =P
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Thankyou.

Yeah, I thought it'd give a little humor.
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I loved it

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That was really good. smile.gif
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Thanks guys. :3
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lol...its good..i like the ending
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Thankyou. :]

I'm not actually five foot three, for a fun fact. I just thought it worked well, and fitted in with the rhyme. Heh.
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I was not expecting a twist an the end. Very cool. Your poem made me smile.
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Thanks. I'm glad it did. smile.gif
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mod edit
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reeally gooodddd
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nice smile.gif I liked it!
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