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( WROTE YOUR NAME ON A BULLET )


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you're so oblivious,
to my pleading cries,
as i whisper in your ear,
what you think are lies.

i wish you never would have seen,
this cold and broken side of me.
but i needed your help, i wanted you here.
now i fall to my knees,
every time you're near.

i wrote your name on a bullet,
so you'd be the last thing to pass through my head.
will you care to bring me roses,
after i'm dead?

oh you were so beautiful,
it gave me chills.
and i'm shaking so painfully,
as i down these pills.

before i pull this trigger,
and your scar of your name seals upon my skin;
would you tell me you love me?
would you give me that last sin?
and would you please hold my hand,
and catch me before i fall dead?
because i don't want to be alone,
and you always ease the dread.

i wrote your name upon a bullet,
so you'd be the last thing to pass through my head.
but now it seems that i can't pull it;
as i sit upon this white-sheeted bed.
because i'm beginning to remember how it felt,
when you wrapped around me like a belt;
so safe and gentle were your hands,
so warm they made my frozen heart melt.

hold me tight as i fall to the floor;
i'm done; it's over.
i am no more.
and your name that i carved into my skin;
would you re-sow the scars again?


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this is what i feel like doing right now.
for reasons that AREN'T described in my "I feel lost." thread, so don't ask about it... because this is about the thing i can't talk about...
critique/comments welcome.

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that was great it is one of the best poems i have ever read
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wow... thanks. that was probably one of the kindest comments i've ever received about my writing. :]
it means a lot. ^.^

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that was really good :'[ i can never write long poems like that. o.O
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hehe, well my poems are fueled by my thoughts and emotions.... therefore sometimes long poems mean big life problems. XD
so you're probably lucky, hehe.
but thank you. :]

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