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I yawn and turn over in bed.
Can't sleep.
Again.

Downstairs the TV is on
And I can hear you calling names
Of players in your never-ending game.
You cheer and wake up my brother
But you don't realize it.
The TV is up too high.

So I stand to take care of the child
But he falls silent
So I return to bed
And pull the blanket up over my head
And curl into a tight ball
For protection from my dreams.

Your heavy footsteps outside of my door
Drag just enough to tell me you're sober
But not enough to tell me whether you
Plan to take my innocence again,
What's left of it, anyway.

Slight fluctuations in your breath that I
Pretend I can detect.
My mind flashes to the clock on the nightstand.
Red blinking numbers that tell the time
Reliably.
Readily.

I can feel the cold knife of air pass under the sheets
And back up to clip the back of my neck and intensify
My shaking, which was caused by you're presence in this room.

A thousand frozen needles cutting my flesh
As you pull back the red blanket and
Lie down without a word behind me.

For a moment you wait, calm fluttering in my chest turns to acid
Running through my lungs. Your hands are gentle at first, as they
Peel me out of my enclosed shape. You smile and leave saliva on my neck
As if I was your wife, and not your son. Am I your son? I might as well not be.

Lying in your arms I used to be safe, when I was small and would climb in beside you
After a nightmare, when the memory was fresh in my mind of being shot through the chest
And you would always hold me and tell me everything would be okay. Did you believe yourself?

Hands all over me, like raindrops or a shower running over my skin. You might as well be made of fire.
I can't help but feel like this s what I want. Can't help but feel like sex with you isn't that bad. Is it
Because I'm used to it? Used to you? I used to go somewhere else in my mind but now I
Stay here mentally with you as you find what you were looking for between my legs
And move your hands back and forth over it, preparing me for what you'll do.

I can't do anything but stare at the clock and be glad it'll all be over soon.
You line yourself up with me and it doesn't hurt anymore, I just feel
A slight pressure as you press your hands to my hips to hold me
Steady. Your body rocks sideways, I'm amazed you can do
This in such an odd position. Usually we've flipped by
Now. Now? Now you swallow hard and I can feel
Saliva running down your throat and my neck
And other fluids running from lower places
Onto the sheet; it'll stain slightly lighter
Than the blanket originally was....

You grunt and moan as you hit the brink of
Your moment in the sun, and as you step away
There's a glow coming from your body. Leftover
From when you finished your task.

You leave me to clean up,
To pass out even though I'm
Covered in both of our sweat and
Saliva and blood from where you bit me,
Semi-white liquid left for me to dispose of.

But I don't clean up.
I'm too exhausted.
I can't move, really.
As I catch my breath,
Exhaustion
Puts
Me
To
S
L
E
E
P
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: OOOOOOOOO
i could imagine the whole thing when i read this, it was good detailed
and... am sorry
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OMG i can feel the pain its so vivid great detail its awesome
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was'nt lieing wen you said very detailed! very affective endging thou.
ahh im always here! you can continue to pm me wenever you wonna talk about anything at all.
sorry.xxx

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You ever want to talk pm me, about anything, im here.
reminds me of stuff i used 2 write
if u just want sum1 2 vent to im here.
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QUOTE (x_MyBloodyVeins_x @ Feb 6 2010, 03:29 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
: OOOOOOOOO
i could imagine the whole thing when i read this, it was good detailed
and... am sorry


Don't be sorry :/
Why would you be sorry?


QUOTE (Emo-carebearbaby @ Feb 6 2010, 05:06 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
OMG i can feel the pain its so vivid great detail its awesome


Thank you smile.gif

QUOTE (echick @ Feb 6 2010, 05:38 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
ohmy.gif sad.gif
was'nt lieing wen you said very detailed! very affective endging thou.
ahh im always here! you can continue to pm me wenever you wonna talk about anything at all.
sorry.xxx


Thanks. It's good to know I can talk to you.

QUOTE (twisted screams @ Feb 6 2010, 07:40 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
You ever want to talk pm me, about anything, im here.
reminds me of stuff i used 2 write
if u just want sum1 2 vent to im here.


Thanks. It's good to know I can talk to you.
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waw...that was trippy. O_o

very detailed. pm me if ya need to talk dude.
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this was well written.

It's like I was there.

It made me have goosebumps.

It's terrible that happens to people.
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QUOTE (X amethyst rose X @ Feb 6 2010, 10:49 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
this was well written.

It's like I was there.

It made me have goosebumps.

It's terrible that happens to people.


i'm scared! it was pretty gud
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Wow. If you've ever heard of Ellen Hopkins, you're poetry reminds me of her writing. Very powerful and painful. All the emotions shine through, even when you're showing, not telling.
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QUOTE (xxblood on my black rosexx @ Feb 6 2010, 09:55 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
i'm scared! it was pretty gud

I meant it was good in a morbid way :3
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for the things you have to go through
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That was very well written and a lot less generic than most of the stuff written on here. It put a new slant on an awful event, male rape is slightly less heard of, which in my opinion makes it that little more... surreal. You didn't go too full on, which was nice, i'd say you handled the subject pretty well too.
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QUOTE (DRINK THE CYANIDE!!! @ Feb 6 2010, 10:41 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
waw...that was trippy. O_o

very detailed. pm me if ya need to talk dude.


pm me if you're willing to :]

QUOTE (X amethyst rose X @ Feb 6 2010, 10:49 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
this was well written.

It's like I was there.

It made me have goosebumps.

It's terrible that happens to people.


It was that powerful? Cool :]

QUOTE (xxblood on my black rosexx @ Feb 6 2010, 10:55 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
i'm scared! it was pretty gud


Thanks :]

QUOTE (PridebeforeFall @ Feb 6 2010, 11:06 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Wow. If you've ever heard of Ellen Hopkins, you're poetry reminds me of her writing. Very powerful and painful. All the emotions shine through, even when you're showing, not telling.


HA! I taught myself to write by reading her books biggrin.gif

My favorite is Identical

QUOTE (Forzare? @ Feb 7 2010, 05:05 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
That was very well written and a lot less generic than most of the stuff written on here. It put a new slant on an awful event, male rape is slightly less heard of, which in my opinion makes it that little more... surreal. You didn't go too full on, which was nice, i'd say you handled the subject pretty well too.


Thank you :]
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QUOTE (Jessticles @ Feb 7 2010, 05:26 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I agree with all of this. It's a horrific thing that you've had to deal with, and I don't mean to undermine that at all, but this poem is so well written. The structure is so well done - particularly the shape of the poem and how you've clearly spent a lot of time crafting it and putting it together. The legnth of the lines generally suit the emotions behind them. The emotion and words choice is great, you really write well. 

I'm going to nominate it to be placed in the best poems section.

And lastly, if you ever need to talk about this, my PM inbox is open to you. smile.gif 


Whoa O.O

hank you SO MUCH for nominating me for the best poems section :]

That's the coolest thing ever :]
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@_@

wow


question is the rapist a boy or a girl?


and the victim is a Boy or a girl?

thats the only confuse part for me sorry but kind na scarry Good
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intense
it reminded me of Ellen Hopkins
it may sound weird 'cause you don't really know me but you can always talk to me about anything if you want
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QUOTE (ejayjay @ Feb 7 2010, 09:41 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
@_@

wow


question is the rapist a boy or a girl?


and the victim is a Boy or a girl?

thats the only confuse part for me sorry but kind na scarry Good


The victim is the rapist's son, and the rapist is the father.

QUOTE (xEmx @ Feb 7 2010, 10:15 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
intense
it reminded me of Ellen Hopkins
it may sound weird 'cause you don't really know me but you can always talk to me about anything if you want


If you wanna talk to me, pm me :]

I'll talk to anyone who wants to.
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Holy cow its like good night Timmy in newgrounds >.<
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Btw guize, just because he's written about it doesn't necessarily mean that's happened to him...
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