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Tell me tell me
Breathe me kill me
Hurt me love me
Slay me.
Think.
I'm not worth my weight in paint,
Pennies,
Paper.
Melt me down and make me into
Soup that warms your emotions
And fixes the sickness I caused you.
I want to be dead.
Let me be,
My bones can be your paperweights.
My breath will no longer foul your oxygen
My loosened door
Will no longer be a risk.
Maybe I could be sold to a cannibal,
I hear Lecter liked young boys.
Maybe my arms and legs could be
Beautiful
Artisan
Works
By a bone-painter.
Maybe I could brighten a home,
Brighten a life,
Lift a spirit
And not be this depressing rock
Tied to your foot
As you sink.
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[poem] Beautiful
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, Jul 15 2010 07:53 PM
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Posted 15 July 2010 - 07:53 PM
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Posted 16 July 2010 - 11:56 AM
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I liked this stanza best:
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Melt me down and make me into
Soup that warms your emotions
And fixes the sickness I caused you.
Soup that warms your emotions
And fixes the sickness I caused you.
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Posted 16 July 2010 - 12:48 PM
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QUOTE (RAVEN. @ Jul 16 2010, 03:56 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I liked this stanza best:
That's actually funny because that was the stanza the whole thing was written around. It was inspired by a can opener, lol
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Posted 16 July 2010 - 01:13 PM
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I liked this. Your use of imagry is very original. I wasen't a fan of the ending, I thought it could of been stronger but there are many beautiful parts in this.
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Posted 16 July 2010 - 08:23 PM
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I liked this a lot. More than flies, which was, interesting? And i think i know how you got a few lines haha.
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