I feel like writing
But I have nothing to say
Something?s wrong
My brain is away
I can?t seem
To figure it out
Making me frown
Making me pout
(I?ve already eaten
Everything in the house
Oh, except for
That one little mouse)
My life is empty
I?m bored everyday
There?s nothing to do
With no one to play
I?m stuck by myself
There?s no one home
No one to talk to
I?m completely alone
My friends aren?t at home
They?re probably out
At the mall with each other
Hanging out, no doubt
All I can do
Is sit and sigh
As they talk about it
And I try not to cry
I try and try
But my thoughts won?t come
My brain is blank
I think it?s numb
I feel like crying
But I hold it in
I?m not about to
Let my impulses win
I show no feeling
If I even have any
What happened to me?
I used to have many
Something?s missing
I can feel the hole
The empty pit
As black as coal
I think I know
How I got that hole
But what did I get
In exchange for my soul?
I don?t think I?m human
That was taken from me
I need it back
Immediately
I?m not fit to live
But not fit to die
But where does that leave me?
Let?s not forget why.
I did something bad
I just don?t know what, or to who
I can?t remember
Or maybe I don?t want to
My life has no meaning
There?s no light at the end
Everything?s dark
My wounds never mend
Maybe I?m better off
To be like this
Devoid of feeling
Never missed
You barely notice me
When I walk through the halls
I?m like a ghost
Surrounded by walls
Life?s not worth living
I?d die if I could
I?ve never tried
I think I should
I think of the pain
That I?m leaving behind
And for once, I can see
My life completely aligned
I grab a knife
Push it into me
At last, I?m happy
I?m finally free.
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Something's Missing
Started by
Lirael
, Mar 04 2008 04:56 AM
#1
Posted 04 March 2008 - 04:56 AM
#2
Posted 04 March 2008 - 07:20 AM
omd's this poem is deep and makes me think i like this poem i'll read it to my friend i'm sure she'll like it toooooo xx
#3
Posted 04 March 2008 - 08:45 AM
wow that is very deep
#4
Posted 04 March 2008 - 08:57 AM
wooaaa.....this is soooo...strong...simple words, not the most complex i've heard...but its the blunt, straight delivery that makes this so...deep and powerful....I like it alot
#5
Posted 04 March 2008 - 11:21 AM
I'm new here. That poem was really, really, really good...
#6
Posted 05 March 2008 - 04:59 AM
Wow thanks everyone
#7
Posted 05 March 2008 - 05:39 AM
I?m stuck by myself, There?s no one home, No one to talk to, I?m completely alone.
My friends aren?t at home, They?re probably out, At the mall with each other, Hanging out, no doubt.
I try and try, But my thoughts won?t come, My brain is blank, I think it?s numb.
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I?m not about to, Let my impulses win.
My life has no meaning, There?s no light at the end, Everything?s dark, My wounds never mend.
Maybe I?m better off, To be like this, Devoid of feeling, Never missed.
You barely notice me, When I walk through the halls, I?m like a ghost, Surrounded by walls.
It might be over half of the poem, but I took out the stanzas that I really did like. Curtesy to you man. I then took the best parts, for me, from them and highlighted it in bold. For some reason, I really really like this line;
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I?m not about to, Let my impulses win.
It's deep. I applaud you on this, I really do. I don't know why I like it so much. It's just great!
My friends aren?t at home, They?re probably out, At the mall with each other, Hanging out, no doubt.
I try and try, But my thoughts won?t come, My brain is blank, I think it?s numb.
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I?m not about to, Let my impulses win.
My life has no meaning, There?s no light at the end, Everything?s dark, My wounds never mend.
Maybe I?m better off, To be like this, Devoid of feeling, Never missed.
You barely notice me, When I walk through the halls, I?m like a ghost, Surrounded by walls.
It might be over half of the poem, but I took out the stanzas that I really did like. Curtesy to you man. I then took the best parts, for me, from them and highlighted it in bold. For some reason, I really really like this line;
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I?m not about to, Let my impulses win.
It's deep. I applaud you on this, I really do. I don't know why I like it so much. It's just great!
#8
Posted 05 March 2008 - 11:39 AM
amazing very powerful i also like the line I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I?m not about to, Let my impulses win.
i feel like that a lot. very good poem
i feel like that a lot. very good poem
#9
Posted 05 March 2008 - 11:45 AM
that is well deep and
when i read that i felt the pain
and emptyness that was very true
and meanful to me
when i read that i felt the pain
and emptyness that was very true
and meanful to me
#10
Posted 05 March 2008 - 11:50 AM
welldone
#11
Posted 06 March 2008 - 02:37 PM
my eyes are stinging with tears.
that was deep
that was deep
#12
Posted 07 March 2008 - 05:42 AM
QUOTE (LiveToRegret @ Mar 5 2008, 09:39 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I'm stuck by myself, There's no one home, No one to talk to, I'm completely alone.
My friends aren't at home, They're probably out, At the mall with each other, Hanging out, no doubt.
I try and try, But my thoughts won't come, My brain is blank, I think it's numb.
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I'm not about to, Let my impulses win.
My life has no meaning, There's no light at the end, Everything's dark, My wounds never mend.
Maybe I'm better off, To be like this, Devoid of feeling, Never missed.
You barely notice me, When I walk through the halls, I'm like a ghost, Surrounded by walls.
It might be over half of the poem, but I took out the stanzas that I really did like. Curtesy to you man. I then took the best parts, for me, from them and highlighted it in bold. For some reason, I really really like this line;
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I'm not about to, Let my impulses win.
It's deep. I applaud you on this, I really do. I don't know why I like it so much. It's just great!
My friends aren't at home, They're probably out, At the mall with each other, Hanging out, no doubt.
I try and try, But my thoughts won't come, My brain is blank, I think it's numb.
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I'm not about to, Let my impulses win.
My life has no meaning, There's no light at the end, Everything's dark, My wounds never mend.
Maybe I'm better off, To be like this, Devoid of feeling, Never missed.
You barely notice me, When I walk through the halls, I'm like a ghost, Surrounded by walls.
It might be over half of the poem, but I took out the stanzas that I really did like. Curtesy to you man. I then took the best parts, for me, from them and highlighted it in bold. For some reason, I really really like this line;
I feel like crying, But I hold it in, I'm not about to, Let my impulses win.
It's deep. I applaud you on this, I really do. I don't know why I like it so much. It's just great!
Wow thanks. It must have taken some time to write this whole thing.
Thanks for making the effort!
And thank you to the rest of you who commented
#13
Posted 07 March 2008 - 09:56 AM
QUOTE (Different @ Mar 7 2008, 06:42 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Wow thanks. It must have taken some time to write this whole thing.
Thanks for making the effort!
And thank you to the rest of you who commented
Thanks for making the effort!
And thank you to the rest of you who commented
Yeah, not too long though. And it was worth it. I might too far as to say, it might be just the best poem I have ever read.
Just something about it that I really did like. The effort was my priviledge. xx
#14
Posted 08 March 2008 - 12:00 AM
QUOTE (LiveToRegret @ Mar 8 2008, 01:56 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Yeah, not too long though. And it was worth it. I might too far as to say, it might be just the best poem I have ever read.
Just something about it that I really did like. The effort was my priviledge. xx
Just something about it that I really did like. The effort was my priviledge. xx
Wow the best? Seriously? Thank you so much!
#15
Posted 08 March 2008 - 06:25 AM
I seriously really did like it!
I mean compared in contrast to over poems some differ alot so really I couldn't tell.
But in one respect, yes the best poem I've ever read.
I loved it.
I mean compared in contrast to over poems some differ alot so really I couldn't tell.
But in one respect, yes the best poem I've ever read.
I loved it.
#16
Posted 08 March 2008 - 09:37 PM
QUOTE (LiveToRegret @ Mar 8 2008, 10:25 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I seriously really did like it!
I mean compared in contrast to over poems some differ alot so really I couldn't tell.
But in one respect, yes the best poem I've ever read.
I loved it.
I mean compared in contrast to over poems some differ alot so really I couldn't tell.
But in one respect, yes the best poem I've ever read.
I loved it.
I did work pretty hard on this one
It's probably my favorite.
#17
Posted 08 March 2008 - 10:31 PM
So it should be.
#18
Posted 08 March 2008 - 11:08 PM
LTR, you ever write poetry?
Ever tried?
Ever tried?
#19
Posted 08 March 2008 - 11:21 PM
I write alot of poetry.
The ones I posted on here though are pretty crap. I would never post the ones I think to be good on here, they're too, personal.
The ones I posted on here though are pretty crap. I would never post the ones I think to be good on here, they're too, personal.
#20
Posted 09 March 2008 - 12:40 AM
QUOTE (LiveToRegret @ Mar 9 2008, 03:21 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I write alot of poetry.
The ones I posted on here though are pretty crap. I would never post the ones I think to be good on here, they're too, personal.
The ones I posted on here though are pretty crap. I would never post the ones I think to be good on here, they're too, personal.
Personal in what way?
Because you could always make another account and post them under that name.
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