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My first Poem [or something like it]


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Leilanie I love you just to much to write down
when I look into your eyes I just drown
when my lips touch yours I fly away
if we're together I feel like I'm in heaven
I can't say enough that I love you
and no matter what you say I know I love you more
becouse I just melt when toutch me
and I can take on anything when you smile to me
I cant imagine life whitout you
becouse I love you and I hope you love me to

Ok its not good but its a start ... lollz just say what you think tongue.gif
I wrote this when I thought about my girlfriend and I just began writing
I didn't even knew what I was writing:P lollz
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It is too good...very good!

Dont be so hard on yourself... :wink:

It doesnt really matter what others think..."To Each his own" in poetry.

If you like it, keep it, and If you dont, its yours to change!

I liked it :wink:
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yeah, all poetry is art.
its expressionof what u feel.
ilike it... its sweet...
sounds like u love her...:-)
keep it up..
u will get better and better, and appreciate ur work more the longer u keep it up:-)
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thank you biggrin.gif
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It's cool.
I like it.biggrin.gif
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that made teary :cry:

its so sweet

Loved It biggrin.gif
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biggrin.gif its great as i can relate
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it's really hot.. 8)
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Its not my fear of flying.. it's the fear of crashing down..
sweet dreams and flying machines are in pieces on the ground.. <3
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ik vond deze zkr goed! :wink:
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ik vond deze zkr goed! :wink:


tnx man wink.gif
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