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Always Alone


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This is a new poem I came up with and felt like sharing... Enjoy...

I stand alone
At the end of the road
I stand alone
In my own mind

The flame of my life Flickers
I want it to burst
Surrounded by dreamers
But I can?t handle the first
I hope for the pain
The sorrow and shame

The piercing eyes
You turn from me
But I?m in disguise
You can?t stand me

Pain
This is what I covet
Sorrow
I seem to love it

You are my master
The only disaster
The darkness of night
Hear my plight

It brings life to me
Helps me through the darkness
You hold me
The perfect likeness
I wish for peace
But disaster is what you ace

The blood pumping in my veins
I slice the flesh
My feelings go down the drains
I want to finally rest

Peace
Is all I?ve got
Disaster
You?ll leave me here to rot

I stand alone
In the dark
Alone
Always
Alone

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Oh come on is no-one gonna tell me what they think??
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I like it!
I really like the end, it sounds really desolate in my opinion.
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QUOTE (xpurexpoisonx006x @ Mar 7 2008, 08:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I stand alone
In the dark
Alone
Always
Alone


loved this verse i can relate
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BRAVOO!!! -claps loudy- ^-^
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End bit was definately the best, most hard hitting bit.

Was really good all in all, would like to see more from you smile.gif

Also...haha the title is the same as my user biggrin.gif
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thanks!
I'm glad it sounds desolate; its ment to!
I'm happy you can relate to it yopi40, I find I like poetry alot more if you can relate to it.
Hey, I'm giving this poem my english teacher to see if I can submit it for coursework, what do you think?
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Cry.gif Cry.gif
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Thanks
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damn! that was good, talented! Applause.gif hope to see more of your poems (keep writing!)
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thanks lol dont worry i have tonns smile.gif

xx
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Beautiful <3
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You have good poems... happy.gif happy.gif
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