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[aleks arsenic]

Kinda sad, idk I'm not cutting now but it just sorta flowed out. Hope someone enjoys it, I guess I just had to vent.
Ps. I know my grammar and punctuation suck lol

I cut into my wicked flesh,
And it all begins to gush.
Then I remember back to the days,
When you always made me blush.

I lick my flowing wounds
That till my last breath will bleed
But you just will not leave my head
So i know now what I need.

The scarlet river's pooling
I think I just might give.
But the image of your beauty
Is making me want to live

I feel like I am slipping
Will this be my last day?
I had much left to give you,
And so much more to say.

If I don't wake tomorrow
So much will be left unsaid.
I fear that I am losing you,
I fear that I'll be dead.

Why do I do this to myself?
What do I have to gain?
How silly it was of me,
To purposely hit a vein.

I know this is the end now
I can nolonger fight.
All that's left is my goodbye,
I love you, and goodnight

[Let_Love_Bleed_Red]

I like it...it has a great flow and I can relate easily to the poem and the explanation at the beginning...
One thing though that is bothering me is the "till" part it would sound better if you used until

[skylightcloud]

Love it, the end really hits me.

[EM0-K!D]

awesome

[PageNotFound404]

http://vampirefreaks...hena&archived=1 (Scroll down to the third panel)
http://vampirefreaks...NeverShoutRhena (OP)

You could have justified that you were simply sharing the poem, until you said "your grammar and punctuation suck".
Don't tell me you "bought copy-right" this one like that Despairl guy did, otherwise this is going to be considered as plagiarism.

[Steve]

http://vampirefreaks...hena&archived=1 (Scroll down to the third panel)
http://vampirefreaks...NeverShoutRhena (OP)

You could have justified that you were simply sharing the poem, until you said "your grammar and punctuation suck".
Don't tell me you "bought copy-right" this one like that Despairl guy did, otherwise this is going to be considered as plagiarism.

OOOH OP just got busted! But yeah, I'm going to lock this thread.

aleks arsenic: As always, if you are the original poster of this poem, give some evidence supporting your claim and I'll unlock the thread and apologise for not believing you in the first place. Otherwise, shame on you for not being creative enough to at least come up with your own terrible poem. Of course, since you can't post in this thread giving evidence, just message me personally with something solid.

Edited by Forzare!, 11 April 2012 - 06:11 AM.
if you do not have sufficient evidence, you will also be warned.