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[M4dR1L3y]

What pretty mask,
Will I wear today?
Are you sure,
You want to play?
You still think,
That its a game?
I promise Hun,
It's not the same.
Outside I'm smiling
What pretty mask,
Do I put on?
A little paint,
The real me's gone.
A simple grin,
And there's my con.
What pretty mask,
Do I put on?
Inside I'm fading
Are you sure,
You think it's fun?
A scarlet mark,
It weighs a ton.
You better leave,
Put down the gun.
Are you sure,
You think it's fun?
See me falling
You really think,
That its a game?
There's no point,
You have no name.
The sad truth,
I need the pain.
You really think,
That its a game?
The ground is coming
I promise Hun,
You don't want this
You will crave,
That special death kiss.
Stand and aim,
You will not miss.
I promise Hun,
You don't want this.
Now there's nothing







I hate the sad days. They consume you.

[demonen_houder]

this is a very nice poem. 

[EspoirTheMage]

i really don't like the format of this poem. I believe the poem could be much better if it wasn't lined the way it is. I like the idea of it, the topic, it's rather good, i just think it needs a little proofing a little. 

 

If these are your real feelings, more power to you to get them out this way though, As for a creative piece, I would take a little more time on it.

[M4dR1L3y]

How would one go about improving the format?