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Broken Doll


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I am a broken doll,
Average I am no more,
On the outside I am perfection,
But, my heart is bruised and sore.

The only visible sign of hurt,
Is the sadness in my eyes,
No one knows how I feel,
My smile is my disguise.

So sweet looking on the outside,
But inside angry and sour,
Why must I watch such a tradgey,
Every day, hour by hour.

Inside my broken heart,
Is swimming in my tears,
For it's thinking of the tradgey,
I've seen through the years.

I am a broken doll,
Who'll be broken even more,
On the outside I am perfection
But my heart is bruised and sore.


If you want to use this poem ask me first.

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QUOTE (Femmeputer @ Mar 28 2008, 11:18 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>






I am a broken doll,
Average I am no more,
On the outside I am perfection,
But, my heart is bruised and sore.

The only visible sign of hurt,
Is the sadness in my eyes,
No one knows how I feel,
My smile is my disguise.

So sweet looking on the outside,
But inside angry and sour,
Why must I watch such a tradgey,
Every day, hour by hour.

Inside my broken heart,
Is swimming in my tears,
For it's thinking of the tradgey,
I've seen through the years.

I am a broken doll,
Who'll be broken even more,
On the outside I am perfection
But my heart is bruised and sore.


If you want to use this poem ask me first.

i love that poem its very deep!!^_^
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Good one. The picture sets the mood when reading the poem very well.
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QUOTE (admin @ Mar 28 2008, 09:36 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Good one. The picture sets the mood when reading the poem very well.


Thank you very much, I was actually thinking about drawing a broken doll on a windowsill look out to a cloudy rainy day.
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QUOTE
On the outside I am perfection
But my heart is bruised and sore.


Oh my Sweet Gosh

high heavenly words

can't know wt to say or ths

keep it always like tht *thumb up*
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hey i need a poem printed off the internet for english class, and i was wondering if i could use yours? all credit goes straight to you.
and btw it was really good.
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OMG!!!! that is amazing!!!!!!! i love it!!!! Big Grin.gif
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That's Very deep...I love it....sometimes I feel the very same way...Great Job.
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omg...this poem is really great Applause.gif
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Wow.
Your writing skills are amazing.
Uber Kudos to you.
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Oh my Gosh
this poem is so deep
and so beautiful
I LOVE IT!!!!
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It's a great poem. Really well done.
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I love it!
Its so deep!
The rhyming is awesome and your rhythm is great!
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The metaphor really works... It made me think.



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thats how i feel all the time. you jsut summed it up in a poem.
it was beautiful! =]
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Beautiful poem.
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Need I say anything? The awesome-ness of the poem, the flow of the words over computer keys, the simplicity that means so much yet says little, it moves me to a new hippy-like level.

Moy moy kudos chicita.

XOXO
Lydia
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