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Broken Angel Wings


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so sweetly
you kissed me
and it wasn't the wind.
but you blew by
so quickly
did it really begin?

you tempt me
with fire
and you bleed so you know
that i'm right there
but ive discovered
that your feelings never show
so i'll fall down
with these angel wings and i'm screaming

someone grab the tape
so i can fix these things
my broken angel wings
someone help me up
'cause i'm so fucked up
that it never comes out straight
but i know you'll be right there
still i'm trapped in nowhere
flying with broken wings

silently
you hold me
as i bleed half to death
my agony
i'm screaming
for you i would die

but you see right through me
and i'm not really sure
are you just like the movies?
would you really last?
'cause i'm caught my past
with these angel wings and i'm screaming

someone grab the tape
so i can fix these things
my broken angel wings
someone help me up
'cause i'm so fucked up
that it never comes out straight
but i know you'll be right there
still i'm trapped in nowhere
flying with broken wings

shut the door
stand near me
can you see how bad i bleed
you understand
i have to leave
and you should see [you should see]

someone grab the tape
so i can fix these things
my broken angel wings
someone help me up
'cause i'm so fucked up
that it never comes out straight
but i know you'll be right there
still i'm trapped in nowhere
flying with broken wings


but i don't know
if i should go
should i leave or should i stay?
and if i do,
will i still love you?
do you know the answer
is it true?

someone grab the tape
so i can fix these things
my broken angel wings
someone help me up
'cause i'm so fucked up
that it never comes out straight
but i know you'll be right there
still i'm trapped in nowhere
flying with broken wings


and i fall
just fall
oh, god i fall
into your arms
let it go
it's all right
i just can't right now
but i won't give this fight
i'm gonna fall
but ill get up
i won't fall
no not again
not goddamn again

[getting softer as they go]
with these wings i fall
they weren't broken at all
i just can't fly right now
but i'll get up someday
put a smile on my face
i'll understand you then maybe
with these wings i fall
no they weren't broken at all
i just can't fly right now.....


please rate and reply and all that! xoxo
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I'd give it a very high 8/10 actually no, a 9/10 as a song (definately as a song) because your chorus is really strong, so I think it would work really really well. Well done, you're definately on to something.
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QUOTE (XxXInWithTheBulletsXxX @ Apr 2 2008, 01:45 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I'd give it a very high 8/10 actually no, a 9/10 as a song (definately as a song) because your chorus is really strong, so I think it would work really really well. Well done, you're definately on to something.


oh, wow. thank you. i think i'll do that. biggrin.gif
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I agree with XxXInWithTheBulletsXxX... smile.gif
It was really good, I loved reading it...
Keep it up..
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QUOTE (xpurexpoisonx006x @ Apr 3 2008, 12:38 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
I agree with XxXInWithTheBulletsXxX... smile.gif
It was really good, I loved reading it...
Keep it up..



thank you! umm, i'm gonna turn this into a grammy moment. (lol, i'm such a loser Loser.gif ) i'd like to thank you people for taking a leap of faith and reading this, because no matter what you guys think, it's bad. sooooo soooo bad. but you read it. YAY! umm, i wanna thank my mom and dad for doing things no one wants to imagine their parents doing, because if they didn't, then i wouldn't be here making an idiot of myself. and i wanna thank my stepdad, because even though he was abusive and the hell of my life, it was because of him that i lied to myself, and it was because of him that i began writing. and a special message to him, thank god you're in prison.

i think ill write about him next. and not a word of it will rhyme. so there.
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this is somewhat embarrassing, but would mind if i borrowed some of your lyrics for a metal song i wrote?

i think this is amazing.
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QUOTE (xbackandforthx @ Apr 3 2008, 04:28 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
this is somewhat embarrassing, but would mind if i borrowed some of your lyrics for a metal song i wrote?

i think this is amazing.


oh, wow! this is a first....umm, sure, you'd just have to tell me which ones. thank you so much!
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omg....Holycow.....really really great poem.....or song....
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QUOTE (ScreaMo-Holic @ Apr 4 2008, 10:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
omg....Holycow.....really really great poem.....or song....


thank you♥
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